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    Colton's Sword

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    Hare

    Rank : 3-5
    Title : Bear's Sin of Envy
    EXP : 10397
    Posts : 17

    Colton's Sword

    Post by Hare on Sat Jan 24, 2015 4:18 am

    Equipment



    Equipment Name: Soul Silver
    Equipment Type: Sword
    Rank: Holy
    Treasure: No

    Description:  Soul Silver is a massive broadsword shaped like a giant butcher knife. It has a circle cut out of the top and a semi circle near the handle, which, as demonstrated by Colton, seem to fit the sword's purpose of decapitation aptly. Its extremely long handle is detachable

    Fighting Style: Colton fighting with this sword using his levitation ability. Often using quick slashes and decapitations to quickly finish off is opponent. If not he lare sword is also able to block attack making it easy to block attack like punches.

    Empowered: Yes




    Ability


    Name: Luminescent Hare
    Type: Defensive/Offensive
    Description: Colton transforms Soul Silver into a large Purple bunny. This bunny is used to block attacks of the same rank and below. It can block 50% of a rank above him 25% of two and so on.

    Strengths: This bear is able to move by itself to block attacks. So Colton doesn't need to move it he just needs to summon it.
    Weaknesses: The bear is slow. So fast attacks it may not be able to get to in time. Therefore Colton likes to keep it put so it doesn't move a lot.

    Fighting Style: He like to summon it to surprise the opponent. It is very funny see the look on their face when they see this giant. Well its a giant to Colton.




    Techniques


    Name: Hare bash
    Type: Offensive
    Rank: Expert
    Description: Colton summons his hare. The hare can then do a move where he curls up into a ball and and begins to spin into a rapid ball of death. He would then ram himself into the opponent which can cause major damage.

    Duration: 1 post
    Cooldown: 4 post
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    Axel Rover

    Name : Axel Rover
    Rank : 2-5
    Title : Explorer
    EXP : 9316
    Posts : 39
    Age : 20

    Re: Colton's Sword

    Post by Axel Rover on Wed Feb 04, 2015 1:41 am

    Hello Hare! Today I will be grading your sword , Soul Sword!  Any corrections you need are below:

    Soul Sword: Give me the height of the sword as well as the material used, i.e steel.

    Luminescent Hare: Alright, a few things here. First of all, instead of just saying the sword transforms into the Hare, explain the process, i.e the area brightens around the sword and once you are able to see it again, it is a hare, or a puff of smoke is eminated and a few seconds later the hare is summoned, or something else?

    Next is the physical characteristics of this hare, because 'large Purple bunny' won't cut it. Give me it's height, weight, maybe even how long his ears are, and if it's arms and legs are extended to make it look more like a human and less like a hare, or just literally a giant hare with no human characteristics. Also in the physical characteristics department, instead of just saying it moves slow, give me a comparison, like if he moves like an average citizen, or maybe even less than that?

    Final thing about this form is the blocking feature you give him. The rank thing doesn't work since it is still basically a holy ranked weapon, and weapons are ranked differently than the ranks of a person or a technique, and don't forget regular attacks that don't require techs like a punch aren't exactly ranked, which is why we have a skill system. The only thing I could suggest to revamp this is that you have the Hare's skin literally be whatever material you used for the sword, i.e steel, and he will be able to defend you with the durability of whatever rank the weapon currently is, so anything able to break a holy weapon would be able to break your Hare. Since it is a transformation, I would say that any damage it receives in the form wouldn't affect the actual sword UNLESS it gets completely destroyed. Heck, you could even maybe make his claws long, and since they would be like the skin, made of the sword's material, you could effectively turn this hare into a walking sword, just a suggestion though. Anyway, this is merely a suggestion, so you can come up with another way of making the defense system if you please.

    Also, due to it's nature, it will need a duration and cooldown.

    Hare Bash: Well, you say the Hare generally is slow, so unless you want this attack to be slow as well, tell me how faster he is in this form.

    Bump when you are finished editing.

    Note: The weapon itself is free due to beta bonuses, but empowerment costs 600 exp, since it costs the same as the cost of the equipment. Also, the tech costs 700 exp, adding up to roughly 1300 exp. Just wanted to let you know, because it says you have about 1400 exp on your profile, and you are also buying a tech for your full counter.

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