Hello, My name's FieryNyan/Ares, and I'm here to check your app
1. You can't be both Adventurer and Criminal. An Adventurer is someone who travels around, without being bounded to any Kingdom by his own free will. A criminal, on the other hand, is forced to travel around, because he's wanted, and he travels around to escape the guards, etc.
2. Please fill up a Title and rank
3. Can you expand on the overall Appearance? Instead of just describing his outfit and clothings, maybe you can touch more on his physical body? Like is he over weight? Is he buff? Etc etc
4. You need minimum 5 likes and dislikes each. Also, if possible, elaborate on each likes and dislikes. Why does he like/dislike them? How much does he like/dislike it? How much is this motivation affecting him?etc.
5. Expand on your motivation. What about his family is he motivated for? To prove his family is strong? Make his family proud? Or what? Why did he gain such motivation, and with that motivation, what is he trying to achieve/accomplish?
6. You need 3 fears. And expand on them. Why is he afraid it? And maybe much more extension. Let your fingers flow like a river while expanding all these
7. For your conversations, please please use the proper punctuations
That's all for now! Edit the necessaries and post when you have edited! Over and out
1. You can't be both Adventurer and Criminal. An Adventurer is someone who travels around, without being bounded to any Kingdom by his own free will. A criminal, on the other hand, is forced to travel around, because he's wanted, and he travels around to escape the guards, etc.
2. Please fill up a Title and rank
3. Can you expand on the overall Appearance? Instead of just describing his outfit and clothings, maybe you can touch more on his physical body? Like is he over weight? Is he buff? Etc etc
4. You need minimum 5 likes and dislikes each. Also, if possible, elaborate on each likes and dislikes. Why does he like/dislike them? How much does he like/dislike it? How much is this motivation affecting him?etc.
5. Expand on your motivation. What about his family is he motivated for? To prove his family is strong? Make his family proud? Or what? Why did he gain such motivation, and with that motivation, what is he trying to achieve/accomplish?
6. You need 3 fears. And expand on them. Why is he afraid it? And maybe much more extension. Let your fingers flow like a river while expanding all these
7. For your conversations, please please use the proper punctuations
That's all for now! Edit the necessaries and post when you have edited! Over and out
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