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Harleen Quinzel- Name : Harleen Quinzel
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FieryNyan- Name : Ares
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Ok, I got some comments. I know you've clarified that the wool has its own mind, therefore it'll be able to protect the user from attacks the user doesn't know about. Is the user able to control it on his own will though? It isn't stated there lol. Like can you be able to change your armor to look differently, or even feint defend moves? Or you can't manipulate it around at all? ( Include this in the strength section)
How fast does it move/React? I know you've stated "of equal or lower tier", but how about level? Like if this guy is of equal tier as you, but his Speed is lvl 3, will he outpace the armor? I suggest that you give it a speed lvl too.
How big of an attack or surface area can this armor cover?
And is water effective against it too? Since wool would absorb water, and once it absorbs water, it would be bulky, no?
How fast does it move/React? I know you've stated "of equal or lower tier", but how about level? Like if this guy is of equal tier as you, but his Speed is lvl 3, will he outpace the armor? I suggest that you give it a speed lvl too.
How big of an attack or surface area can this armor cover?
And is water effective against it too? Since wool would absorb water, and once it absorbs water, it would be bulky, no?
Harleen Quinzel- Name : Harleen Quinzel
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I said in the fighting style that it can be used to cover up to 2 other people, I added i a speed in the strengths, and added in something about water in the weaknesses. ]
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Thank you for checking my app!
Britannia- Admin
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Spinning small defensive structures, granted you still want it after this post will need more detail.
As in, how often can you do it? I would suggest like a once per thread emergency function of your armor to defend it from extremely dangerous attacks.
Also, if you use the term "defensive structures" you need to state what kind. Walls, barriers, cages, perhaps even tails/tentacles that flow around you deflecting attacks? You need to be specific.
The rest is fine, the previous addition just needs to be elaborated upon.
As in, how often can you do it? I would suggest like a once per thread emergency function of your armor to defend it from extremely dangerous attacks.
Also, if you use the term "defensive structures" you need to state what kind. Walls, barriers, cages, perhaps even tails/tentacles that flow around you deflecting attacks? You need to be specific.
The rest is fine, the previous addition just needs to be elaborated upon.
Harleen Quinzel- Name : Harleen Quinzel
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Britannia- Admin
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Once per post o__o That is really powerful. I thought of it as more of a resort if you need serious defense and protection from all sides. I could see something like a 1 post duration and a 3 post cooldown on a wall/cocoon. But every post is too much :/ Also, if it is that frequent, then it won't be THAT strong, let me tell you.
Lastly, you never mentioned if the armor is self-repairing because of the ability. Add in if it is, or isn't. Because the ability would actually suggest that it is, and I could see it being that. Of course, if it is, then damaging it would still significantly decrease its defensive potential, not to mention that fire and water would be reducing the self-repairing functions.
That is, if it is self-repairing. If it isn't, just don't add any of the things I said in, and just state "Despite being able to spin additional wool, the armor can not repair itself" or something similar to that to clarify that the armor does not self-repair.
Lastly, you never mentioned if the armor is self-repairing because of the ability. Add in if it is, or isn't. Because the ability would actually suggest that it is, and I could see it being that. Of course, if it is, then damaging it would still significantly decrease its defensive potential, not to mention that fire and water would be reducing the self-repairing functions.
That is, if it is self-repairing. If it isn't, just don't add any of the things I said in, and just state "Despite being able to spin additional wool, the armor can not repair itself" or something similar to that to clarify that the armor does not self-repair.
Harleen Quinzel- Name : Harleen Quinzel
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i added all of your suggestions in the abilities weakness
Britannia- Admin
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I did not mean that the basic ability, of spinning wool to defend yourself with to have a duration and cooldown. I was targeting the spinning a cocoon. Not the basic ability.
Meaning this:
"(this cocoon can be done once per post)"
needs to be replaced with this:
"Can be used for one post with 3 post cool down. "
The basic ability can be something like Gaara's Sand that you defends you on its own. The something like a wall/coocoon as a small bonus needs a duration and cooldown.
Meaning this:
"(this cocoon can be done once per post)"
needs to be replaced with this:
"Can be used for one post with 3 post cool down. "
The basic ability can be something like Gaara's Sand that you defends you on its own. The something like a wall/coocoon as a small bonus needs a duration and cooldown.
Harleen Quinzel- Name : Harleen Quinzel
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